Tosh
Cheer Parent
- Nov 22, 2011
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How much critique are you looking for? I may go overboard....I get your story, but Opering, grammer and punctuations are all over the place...ie
Your first sentence should be a full sentence, remove the comma
you should not use the word "Can't" it should be "can not"
4th should be spelled out as it is under 10
4th line down " I love everything about it"....it what? too vague. Say what it is "cheerleading"....etc.
Let me know if you need help and I can continue and message you.
Thanks,
Shayne
Your first sentence should be a full sentence, remove the comma
you should not use the word "Can't" it should be "can not"
4th should be spelled out as it is under 10
4th line down " I love everything about it"....it what? too vague. Say what it is "cheerleading"....etc.
Let me know if you need help and I can continue and message you.
Thanks,
Shayne